She hates
waiting. It reminds her of overcrowded bus halts and doctor visits. Being the
last to be picked on the team. Standing by the school gate at 3.30 pm as
everyone leaves one by one. Sitting at Pizza Hut in her prettiest jeans,
chewing the polish off her nails.
She feels her
energy drifting away. Already her feet have grown numb. She doesn’t think she
can wait much longer, enduring their stares. You know the feeling when you
think the whole world is laughing at you and whispering behind your back, but
no one cares, not really? No one even sees you.
She likes being
invisible, though. It means no one is laughing. But for once, she wishes they
would notice her. Talk to him, she wants to say. All he wants is a little attention.
He gets tired of waiting, too. After all, he is only three…
Funny, how
being invisible makes you put things in perspective. It gives you time to
reflect. She reflects on all those moments she could have been visible, but wasn’t.
It is sad, really,
how you inevitably want to go back and live the moments you didn’t.
Aftermath is
everything. The tyres screech, the mother screams and everyone runs to the
middle of the road. She feels the transfer of his energy as it surges through
her feet, a pang so sharp and strong it almost makes her feel alive. For an
instant she wonders about the moments of his short life, whether the visible
moments have been enough to outweigh the invisible ones, or whether, like her, he
will spend the rest of eternity feeding off the moments of those that had lived.
You have got this amazing talent to convey the plot in a flowing and compelling way.Plus, love the way you brought the characters to the flow.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed, reread and then literally covered the whole blog in one sitting!Expecting more posts from you in the future :)
Thank you! Nothing better than feedback for an amateur writer! Yes more coming up soon :)
DeleteYou are a gifted writer! I enjoyed reading this and your other posts during my long commute to work. Keep up the great work! Look forward to more of your work! Cheers!
ReplyDeleteThank you! So glad you enjoyed it :)
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